My Craziness :)

Fur Ihm

The candle flickers nearer, burning me
I hold my wound close near
I lay my hand and press the keys
Wishing I were there
And everything I'd be
Would never die; come closer
I'd hold you next to me
I'd lay your hand on my heart
And the steady, beating rythem
Would calm your fears to free
What you think of me
You'd kiss me tender
I'd say that I love you
And we'd never again be
Far across the distance
Cause I brought you back to me


Written: 24 June 2009

Escape


I close the door behind me shut
I drop silver keys on glass floor
Slumber in my dreams
Places I never wanted to explore...

I walk the winding stairway up,
Sleeping wanderer neverdreaming
Wishing I would never wake
Of love and hate wondering

Sleeping dead behind stained ivory doors
I flee the terror of my dreams
The man behind me smiles
Rustling lace behind me screams

Never fleeing fast enough
I cry for the night to heed her end
The moon grows colder, lonely
Before I wake alone in my bed


Written: ??? (abt five months ago)

Random Poem


Lost in time
I ride my silver demons
Dying just to lie behind my masks
Of all that I claim
I don't live I only sleep
Drowning in an empty bottle
Wishing I hadn't taken what wasn't mine
I die each night I close my eyes
And when I sleep
No peace I get
I see his face a bloodied mess
I wake in panic
Trying to remeber
What I did to cause my nightmare
I wish I knew
Just what happened
But I'm drowning in an empty bottle
Wishing I could die

Written: ??? Abt five months ago (why the hell didn't I date this?)

Killing You


wish i were there
to hold you as you cry
to convince you not to kill you
as you rot away slowly in my arms
thin, hollowed cheeks reflect in my eyes
i scream to god to end your pain
cause though he may want you back
i cannnot live knowing i was not enough
to help you heal
your thinned, hollowed cheeks
before you kill yourself



Ok, so these are all pretty old, but some of my better ones. Actually, I'm not a big fan of poetry, and isn't really my thing. Constructive critisism would be helpful.

I liked them all Its like a more organized version of mine lol.

I like the tones and visuals I got in my head.

It's like, I read them, and was too lazy to post. What a bastard am I.

Anyway, I don't like giving critique to poems. I have the "there's no point" attitude in my head with poems and songs and other similar works because they're all so abstract and variable. So I'll just say I could really see the pain in the poems, like it wasn't just some crap some bored kid wrote down. It really came from the heart, I guess you could say. And for that, I like it — or them, I mean.

I like the first one, because there's captilization... lol It seems more cohesive than the rest. I have no idea. I'm mindless.

Den wrote:It's like, I read them, and was too lazy to post. What a bastard am I.

Anyway, I don't like giving critique to poems. I have the "there's no point" attitude in my head with poems and songs and other similar works because they're all so abstract and variable. So I'll just say I could really see the pain in the poems, like it wasn't just some crap some bored kid wrote down. It really came from the heart, I guess you could say. And for that, I like it — or them, I mean.

I like the first one, because there's captilization... lol It seems more cohesive than the rest. I have no idea. I'm mindless.

Yeah. Well. I write about specific people or situations in mind. So. But I'm glad you liked the first one. I would have been so sad had you not. I'll tell you why later.

sleeepygoron wrote:

Den wrote:It's like, I read them, and was too lazy to post. What a bastard am I.

Anyway, I don't like giving critique to poems. I have the "there's no point" attitude in my head with poems and songs and other similar works because they're all so abstract and variable. So I'll just say I could really see the pain in the poems, like it wasn't just some crap some bored kid wrote down. It really came from the heart, I guess you could say. And for that, I like it — or them, I mean.

I like the first one, because there's captilization... lol It seems more cohesive than the rest. I have no idea. I'm mindless.

Yeah. Well. I write about specific people or situations in mind. So. But I'm glad you liked the first one. I would have been so sad had you not. I'll tell you why later.

I think I already know. :p

Den wrote:

sleeepygoron wrote:

Den wrote:It's like, I read them, and was too lazy to post. What a bastard am I.

Anyway, I don't like giving critique to poems. I have the "there's no point" attitude in my head with poems and songs and other similar works because they're all so abstract and variable. So I'll just say I could really see the pain in the poems, like it wasn't just some crap some bored kid wrote down. It really came from the heart, I guess you could say. And for that, I like it — or them, I mean.

I like the first one, because there's captilization... lol It seems more cohesive than the rest. I have no idea. I'm mindless.

Yeah. Well. I write about specific people or situations in mind. So. But I'm glad you liked the first one. I would have been so sad had you not. I'll tell you why later.

I think I already know. :p

We'll see, haha.