A Rose (Song)

A Rose
When people talk about beauty, they say rose
When people talk about perfection, they say rose
A human is no rose, nor should try to be, so
A person should be what they know

Try to be this, try to be that
Wish to be this, want to be that
You will do what you do, that is the case
No need to change to avoiding a judging face

Flaws all come with every person
An error is something everybody has
But then again, that’s not a reason to mourn
Because even a rose will have a thorn

You can cover them up, hide them away
Try to only show one’s petals and leaves
But, thorns will always poke through
Showing everybody the real you

The dew glistens off the petals
Showing the true beauty of the rose
Everyone will show what they can do
Why change that to become someone new?


Perfection is something rare, not easy to find
You have faults, as do I, as will everyone
But then again, that’s not a reason to mourn
Because even a rose will have a thorn

Every rose needs to be kept beautiful
But even in that beauty you have the thorns
All those blossoms take it a little bit of water
No need to act like you are God’s daughter

Hold a rose too tight, and you will be cut
You have to hold a rose in the right places
Can you blame a rose for what it grew?
How dare they judge for what they think they knew

Nobody wants to see a rose get hurt
Nobody wants to see a rose get scarred
Preserve your rose, protect from being worn
Lest you let your rose be torn

Fake smile
Real thorn
People are vile
Try to make you mourn

Ignore, try
Never cry
Because of a thorn
You should never ever mourn

Every rose is beautiful, in a unique way
Everyone gets cut by one, at a certain time
But that’s no reason to mourn
We all have our own special thorn

Even with a simple cut from the rose
It keeps it’s beauty in your eyes
I don’t ever want to see you mourn
I love every beautiful little thorn

Not a fan of some lines, but I like the concept of using perfection and roses in a poem. It's something I should take into consideration, because I'm a perfectionist.


And, er, Ferret, the "Art" forum was meant for all forms of art, including writing. =P It's fine though, we'll just keep this then.

I like that you have the order to maintain a pattern in poems.
It's very pretty, good show ^^

Den:
Which lines? I'm still editing it.
And, my bad..haha. Didn't realize that.

Mike:
Thanks. The rhythm seems weird, probably. But, because, it's a song not a poem, haha. So when actually played it's arranged differently.

No, I mean I hate poetry. I hate half the lines I see in poetry. That means your doing it right. lol

And honestly, I hate giving criticism, and some times when receiving it. Often times, half the criticism you get is because the critic's style is different and doesn't like the way you did it.

For example, I hate long poems in general, so I'd tell you to get rid of half your stuff. I'm a pithy person, most times, so maybe you can have Sara attack your poem instead. I hear she likes confrontation.

Treble wrote:Den:
Which lines? I'm still editing it.
And, my bad..haha. Didn't realize that.

Mike:
Thanks. The rhythm seems weird, probably. But, because, it's a song not a poem, haha. So when actually played it's arranged differently.

Yussir, Im Holdon's good half on poetry xD

I adore poems and lyrics. And I look at them through the words, not my lifestyle.
Write like...a fuckin poem about moles drinking ....daisy juice.....

And Ill like it xD

Treble wrote:Den:
Which lines? I'm still editing it.
And, my bad..haha. Didn't realize that.

Mike:
Thanks. The rhythm seems weird, probably. But, because, it's a song not a poem, haha. So when actually played it's arranged differently.

But its not a poem...it's a song..haha
If I cut it down, the song would be like, a minute and a half

Den wrote:No, I mean I hate poetry. I hate half the lines I see in poetry. That means your doing it right. lol

And honestly, I hate giving criticism, and some times when receiving it. Often times, half the criticism you get is because the critic's style is different and doesn't like the way you did it.

For example, I hate long poems in general, so I'd tell you to get rid of half your stuff. I'm a pithy person, most times, so maybe you can have Sara attack your poem instead. I hear she likes confrontation.

why drag me into this? I'll get spooked and run away!

Meh, let me attack your poem (song, whatever) later. I'm dying of hunger.

Oh, oops. haha

If it's a song, then anything goes, apparently. I hear other song artists don't even sing coherent words, so you're doing awesome (read: death metal lulz).

So, Joseph, a song is about the sound. I dare you to sing this and add a guitar or something and then post it for me to hear. That's what I'd really like to criticize.

Den wrote:Oh, oops. haha

If it's a song, then anything goes, apparently. I hear other song artists don't even sing coherent words, so you're doing awesome (read: death metal lulz).

So, Joseph, a song is about the sound. I dare you to sing this and add a guitar or something and then post it for me to hear. That's what I'd really like to criticize.

Like my sewer rat Dimmu Borgir xD

Den wrote:Oh, oops. haha

If it's a song, then anything goes, apparently. I hear other song artists don't even sing coherent words, so you're doing awesome (read: death metal lulz).

So, Joseph, a song is about the sound. I dare you to sing this and add a guitar or something and then post it for me to hear. That's what I'd really like to criticize.

Piano, actually...
Can't sing tho. Noooo way

Treble wrote:

Den wrote:Oh, oops. haha

If it's a song, then anything goes, apparently. I hear other song artists don't even sing coherent words, so you're doing awesome (read: death metal lulz).

So, Joseph, a song is about the sound. I dare you to sing this and add a guitar or something and then post it for me to hear. That's what I'd really like to criticize.

Piano, actually...
Can't sing tho. Noooo way

Pretty please, though at least? ^_^

Treble wrote:

Den wrote:Oh, oops. haha

If it's a song, then anything goes, apparently. I hear other song artists don't even sing coherent words, so you're doing awesome (read: death metal lulz).

So, Joseph, a song is about the sound. I dare you to sing this and add a guitar or something and then post it for me to hear. That's what I'd really like to criticize.

Piano, actually...
Can't sing tho. Noooo way

Audio reinforcement! AUDIO REINFORCEMENT!!!!! peas and carrots? ;-;

LokiBeragist wrote:

Treble wrote:

Den wrote:Oh, oops. haha

If it's a song, then anything goes, apparently. I hear other song artists don't even sing coherent words, so you're doing awesome (read: death metal lulz).

So, Joseph, a song is about the sound. I dare you to sing this and add a guitar or something and then post it for me to hear. That's what I'd really like to criticize.

Piano, actually...
Can't sing tho. Noooo way

Audio reinforcement! AUDIO REINFORCEMENT!!!!! peas and carrots? ;-;

What do peas and carrots have to do with anything? O.o But I take everything to literally,so ignore me.

And Joseph, i like it. The rythem seems a little weird, but I know, it's a song, not a poem... even though the two always seemed like the same thing to me, pretty much. Did you want me to shred it and argue it with you? Cause I love arguments, but I don't want to argue if you don't argue back. >.>

sleeepygoron wrote:

LokiBeragist wrote:

Treble wrote:

Den wrote:Oh, oops. haha

If it's a song, then anything goes, apparently. I hear other song artists don't even sing coherent words, so you're doing awesome (read: death metal lulz).

So, Joseph, a song is about the sound. I dare you to sing this and add a guitar or something and then post it for me to hear. That's what I'd really like to criticize.

Piano, actually...
Can't sing tho. Noooo way

Audio reinforcement! AUDIO REINFORCEMENT!!!!! peas and carrots? ;-;

What do peas and carrots have to do with anything? O.o But I take everything to literally,so ignore me.

And Joseph, i like it. The rythem seems a little weird, but I know, it's a song, not a poem... even though the two always seemed like the same thing to me, pretty much. Did you want me to shred it and argue it with you? Cause I love arguments, but I don't want to argue if you don't argue back. >.>

ITS BECAUSE IM A PANDA ISNT IRT?! PANDAS LOOOOOOOOOOOVE ICE CREAM!

LokiBeragist wrote:

sleeepygoron wrote:

LokiBeragist wrote:

Treble wrote:

Den wrote:Oh, oops. haha

If it's a song, then anything goes, apparently. I hear other song artists don't even sing coherent words, so you're doing awesome (read: death metal lulz).

So, Joseph, a song is about the sound. I dare you to sing this and add a guitar or something and then post it for me to hear. That's what I'd really like to criticize.

Piano, actually...
Can't sing tho. Noooo way

Audio reinforcement! AUDIO REINFORCEMENT!!!!! peas and carrots? ;-;

What do peas and carrots have to do with anything? O.o But I take everything to literally,so ignore me.

And Joseph, i like it. The rythem seems a little weird, but I know, it's a song, not a poem... even though the two always seemed like the same thing to me, pretty much. Did you want me to shred it and argue it with you? Cause I love arguments, but I don't want to argue if you don't argue back. >.>

ITS BECAUSE IM A PANDA ISNT IRT?! PANDAS LOOOOOOOOOOOVE ICE CREAM!

I love icecream too. (?)

sleeepygoron wrote:

LokiBeragist wrote:

Treble wrote:

Den wrote:Oh, oops. haha

If it's a song, then anything goes, apparently. I hear other song artists don't even sing coherent words, so you're doing awesome (read: death metal lulz).

So, Joseph, a song is about the sound. I dare you to sing this and add a guitar or something and then post it for me to hear. That's what I'd really like to criticize.

Piano, actually...
Can't sing tho. Noooo way

Audio reinforcement! AUDIO REINFORCEMENT!!!!! peas and carrots? ;-;

What do peas and carrots have to do with anything? O.o But I take everything to literally,so ignore me.

And Joseph, i like it. The rythem seems a little weird, but I know, it's a song, not a poem... even though the two always seemed like the same thing to me, pretty much. Did you want me to shred it and argue it with you? Cause I love arguments, but I don't want to argue if you don't argue back. >.>

Poems are not songs, but songs are poems.
I'm in Mock Trials, I love to argue, haha

Oh great. Now I actually have to argue...

I can't think. My brain is not functioning. What would you like to argue?

Id fail but win at mock triaals, ask Den what I do to people if they say different irl xD

LokiBeragist wrote:Id fail but win at mock triaals, ask Den what I do to people if they say different irl xD

You shoot them? Idk.DO I want to know what you do?

He spits venom in their eyes. It's unsightly... Really, it is, you can't see afterwards, your eyes burn away.

Den wrote:He spits venom in their eyes. It's unsightly... Really, it is, you can't see afterwards, your eyes burn away.

Oooh?

Ok... O.O

sleeepygoron wrote:

Den wrote:He spits venom in their eyes. It's unsightly... Really, it is, you can't see afterwards, your eyes burn away.

Oooh?

Ok... O.O

Its true.

LokiBeragist wrote:

sleeepygoron wrote:

Den wrote:He spits venom in their eyes. It's unsightly... Really, it is, you can't see afterwards, your eyes burn away.

Oooh?

Ok... O.O

Its true.

Wirklich???

sleeepygoron wrote:

LokiBeragist wrote:

sleeepygoron wrote:

Den wrote:He spits venom in their eyes. It's unsightly... Really, it is, you can't see afterwards, your eyes burn away.

Oooh?

Ok... O.O

Its true.

Wirklich???

Ja

@ Den: HOLY FFFFFFFF A SNAKE!